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Sunday, October 07, 2007

A Terrible Trip

Everybody has experience of taking a trip; nevertheless, seldom does people have a terrible trip. But I did.It was an unforgettable and exciting trip which was our graduate one. That day, we assembled in school, waiting for getting on the buses. Then we heard somebody say the tire was flat. But we didn’t care about that. After 20 minutes, we set off. On our way, we chatted and sang gladly. All at once, the bus had a emergency brake, we shook and yelled. Afterwards, we felt the bus losing balance and out of control. After that, the bus seemed to under of control. We all survived. The driver explained because of the new tire’s traction, if it were customary, we would be dead. This was a quite terrible trip.

4 Comments:

At 9:00 AM , Blogger 郭包子 said...

是我錯覺嗎??我好像遇到了兩個瀞婷耶= =

Everybody has experience of taking a trip EXPERIENCE前面要不要加個SOME或A 什麼之類的?

酷~倒裝句耶!

the bus had a emergency brake,哦呵呵EMERGENCY是母音開頭的字唷!不要懷疑用AN吧!

 
At 8:16 PM , Blogger 飛奇 said...

"After that, the bus seemed to under of control."

after that感覺不是很適合,如果可以描述一下時間多長會較妥當
ex:after several minutes later

"This was a quite terrible trip."
加個experience會比較好,因為trip...是指從剛開始去玩到結束回來的這段時間,but這裡只是指車上的時間

 
At 5:43 AM , Blogger 平井" said...

seldom "do" people have a terrible trip.

Before you write "After that" you can describe you and your classmates' feeling or actions while you were in that emergency condition.

 
At 7:28 AM , Blogger :V,瀞 ”婷* said...

哈哈,
妳沒錯,
我幫汶匠跟思思po

 

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