Pollution-Draft one
The more convenient to live, the more pollution we have. Because of industry developing, we have convenient life, and rapid economy. The worth we need to pay is great. First, heavy metal and chemical composition make ground pollution. So, many vegetable and fruit remain poisonous substances result in many symptoms making death. Second, filthy water makes water pollution. In abroad, you can drink the water of river immediately. But when you drink the water of Taiwan, you may need to go to the hospital. Owning to it's dirty and falling of germs. Third, waste gas makes air pollution, such as CO2 , dioxin. The two big problems in the world are the global warming and Christ child. We feel quite helpless. What we can do is only control the content of the CO2 and dioxin. In short, pollution result from advancing technique.

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So, many vegetable and fruit remain poisonous substances result in many symptoms making death. 蔬菜水果加s 。many symtoms "of" making death.
"In abroad, you can drink the water of river immediately. But when you drink the water of Taiwan, you may need to go to the hospital."
我覺得第二句跟上文有些連不起來,"台灣的水"範圍比"台灣河川的水"大很多,可以改成But in Taiwan when you drink the water of river....這樣或類似的
The more convenient to live, the more pollution we have.那個to可以不用 改成we會比較好喔 因為英文講求對稱嘛!
The worth we need to pay is great.
we前面加個which or that
vegetable要加s 但是水果不行
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