An Embarrassing Experience-Draft
I have ever met an embarrassing experience that I would not forget. One day, my friend , Sherry and I went to a department store . When we entered the store. She said " I only have 20 dollars, can you lend me your money? " " Of course, we are the best friends." said I . I thought I had enough money to lend her. So , I didn't check my wallet if I had enough money or not. When we at the sales counter, I found I only had about 50 dollars, I put down all products that I wanted to buy in a hurry. All of people looked at me, I felt so embarrassed and bad. The day must was not my day.

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I have ever met an embarrassing experience that I would not forget.
是不是要用I had?
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"All of people looked at me..."
我覺得應該要限定people,專指當場在的那些人,所以加the會比較好
So, I didn't check wallet if I had enough money or not.我覺得改成
So, I didn't check wallet whether I had enough money or not.會比較好
" Of course, we are the best friends." said I .
用I said感覺比較順
When we at the sales counter
we和at的中間要加were
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